More and more people are becoming seriously overweight. some people say that the price increase of fattening food will solve this problem .to what extent do you agree or disagree?

In present days, working culture
have changed
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has changed
the lifestyle of the people.
This
have caused
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has caused
had caused
causes
caused
has been caused
is causing
was causing
serious impact on the eating habits resulting in various health problems. One of
such
problem is overweight. People habit of eating junk and fast foods that
contains
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contain
various fattening
product
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products
can bring imbalances in the body metabolism. Many authorities consider that increasing the price of
such
product can help us minimize
overweight issue
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the overweight issue
overweight issues
.It is a good step that the government can take in order to take care of their citizen health. One best measure that can be taken by the concerned bodies is by increasing the taxes applied to these products. But
this
will not help to solve the issue until and unless the support will come from our level.There are many poor people who daily diet contains
these
denotes a person or thing
this
type of product.Making the prices higher will have a bad impact on their daily
fooding
capable of being folded up and stored
folding
feeding
pattern.
Although
,
Accept space
,
rich people can even have access to those
products even
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products, even
if the price are
remarkebly
to a remarkable degree or extent
remarkably
higher. Slum people are the one's who have to suffer in their daily life
fooding
weakening in force or intensity
fading
feeding
folding
habits. Therefor
,
Accept space
,
increasing price will not have a great impact
in
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on
reducing the problem of becoming fat. But
,
Accept space
,
the thing
,
Accept space
,
that is
needed is the
awarneness
having knowledge of
awareness
among the people about the healthy eating habits. Schools are spending more time teaching traditional subjects like history. Some people think they should rather spend more time
in
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on
teaching skills that can help students to find a job.These days, many university courses are offered through the internet. Some people think that online teaching has more advantages than conventional classroom teaching or lectures, while others claim that there are significant disadvantages.
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