More and more people are becoming seriously overweight. some people say that the price increase of fattening food will solve this problem .to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In present days, working culture

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the lifestyle of the people.

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have caused

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serious impact on the eating habits resulting in various health problems. One of

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problem is overweight. People habit of eating junk and fast foods that

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contain

various fattening

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products

can bring imbalances in the body metabolism. Many authorities consider that increasing the price of

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product can help us minimize

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the overweight issue

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.It is a good step that the government can take in order to take care of their citizen health. One best measure that can be taken by the concerned bodies is by increasing the taxes applied to these products. But

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will not help to solve the issue until and unless the support will come from our level.There are many poor people who daily diet contains

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rich people can even have access to those

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higher. Slum people are the one's who have to suffer in their daily life

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increasing price will not have a great impact

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reducing the problem of becoming fat. But

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the thing

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needed is the

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among the people about the healthy eating habits. Schools are spending more time teaching traditional subjects like history. Some people think they should rather spend more time

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teaching skills that can help students to find a job.These days, many university courses are offered through the internet. Some people think that online teaching has more advantages than conventional classroom teaching or lectures, while others claim that there are significant disadvantages.

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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More and more people are becoming seriously overweight. some people say that the price increase of fattening food will solve this problem .to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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