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Some people believe children should get homework everyday, while others think they should not. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Education plays a vital role in every aspect of life.It is believed by some people that
homework
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 should not be given to students regularly.
On the other
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hand some
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hand, some
 are in favour of giving
homework
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 to children in order to enhance
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study
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student
 skills at
school
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.Let us discuss both views followed by my own opinion in following paragraphs.
To begin
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 with, let us discuss the merit of not providing
school
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 works on daily
basics
a relation that provides the foundation for something
basis
 to students.The major benefit would be that
student
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students
the student
a student
 can spend their leisure time in other activities
such
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 as co-curricular and creative activities.To explain
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,
when is children indulge in
such
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activities
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activity
 day improve holistic development.
For example
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,
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in Russia, teachers keep students back at
school
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 so they can perform
physio
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Physio
phase
 motor activities in
playground
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the playground
.
Furthermore
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,
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,
let us discuss the positive points of giving
study
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 work. Primarily
,
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repeating the work at home can lead
to get
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to getting
 more ideas of
particular subject
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particular subjects
the particular subject
.To elaborate, when children
study
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 at
home they
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home, they
 get flexible time to
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study
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study, therefore
therefore
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 the catch new thoughts about their
study
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 material.
Moreover
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,
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,
peoples
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the peoples
 can stay away from bad activities
such
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 as alcohol and smoking.
For example
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, according to a
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study 3
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study, 3
% of students in Delhi who do not get
homework
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 are addicted of smoking and drinking. In my opinion
,
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,
ice spot the later. As it has more benefits because it increase our student to work hard for upcoming future as well as to get success in
school
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 too. To conclude
,
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although
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, both the views has
positive answer
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the positive answer
 still the later has more benefits in order to nourish educational career child must
study
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 hard while getting everyday
homework
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thus
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 teachers should encourage
child
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children
the child
 to focus on routine
homework
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.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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