Some people believe that teenagers are facing more problems in their life than they did in the past and this is because parents are spending more time at work than at home. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is irrefutable that today's parents are very

buzy

actively or fully engaged or occupied

busy

in their work as

compred

examine and note the similarities or differences of

compared

past

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the past

.So one section of society

hold

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holds

this

notion that now youngsters have many

hassels

an angry disturbance

hassles

horses

houses

related to their

life

than in the past.

However i

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However, I

However I

agree with

this

point.

First

of all

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teenagers face more problems in their daily

life

this

is because of both the parents are working and

childern

a young person of either sex

children

spend most of the time alone.Teenagers do not get

proper guidness so

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the proper goodness, so

the proper goodness so

proper goodness so

they see problems.

For example

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standard children are in worry that what subjects are good for them.Sometimes they

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pick out, select, or choose from a number of alternatives

chose

chased

choose

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decision and

they faced problems in

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the whole life

life

Secondly

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some teenagers are living with their grandparents.

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Older parents

said

express in words

told

to children according to their own choice like what they should wear and where should they go.

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But

todays generation younger ones do things according to the latest trends.

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, joint families

are merge

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are merging

into nuclear

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a social unit living together

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.Children are living without supervision and sometimes teenaged

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pick out, select, or choose from a number of alternatives

chose

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the wrong path

a wrong path

for

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instance, they

see unnecessary things from

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the internet

and follow them it creates problems in their daily

life

. To sum up

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today teenaged live alone because of both parents are

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a worker who is hired to perform a job

employees

employers

employed

so they do not get good

guidness

that which is pleasing or valuable or useful

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and grandparents are not following

new trend

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the new trend

new trends

a new trend

and cease their grandchildren to follow that trend.And families are small so no one have at home to see the children so they face problems.

Tue Dec 03 2019

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1Word repetition
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226 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.5

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Some people believe that teenagers are facing more problems in their life than they did in the past and this is because parents are spending more time at work than at home. Do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Due to low- cost airlines, many more people can travel abroad than ever before. do the advantages that tourists bring to the countries they visit outweigh the disadvantages?

There is a lot of pressure on young people today to succeed academically. As a result, some people believe that non-academic subjects, such as physical education and cookery, should be removed from the school syllabus so that children can concentrate on academic work. Do you agree or disagree?

Some countries encourage foreign companies to open in their country. Many people think the government should focus on encouranging local business rather than foreign businesses. To what extent do you agree?

1.You and your brother have decided to go for a holiday but due to some reason, your brother is not able to join you for holiday. Write a letter to your friend to invite him/her for holiday. Give detail plan of vacation. State reason why your brother will not come with you. Invite your friend.

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