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All cars that burn fossil fuel should be banned and electric cars whould replace them. Do you agree or disagree?

#cars #fuel #whould
First
 of all I can say I'm totally
agreed
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agree
 with
this
 idea. I can explain why my ideas in
this
 way easily. The world is going through bad everyday and maybe we don't see the changes
now but
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now, but
 after years we will see clearly. Climate changing is going to affect all of us and all animals and not just climate changing
,
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,
on the other hand
 we have air pollution.Let's check China.People are wearing masks because of air pollution
,
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,
 of
course there
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course, there
 is big importance
population but
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population, but
 it's affecting by what we are doing to world as individuals. When we check the reasons of air pollution we see carbon
monoxite
an oxide containing just one atom of oxygen in the molecule
monoxide
, not filtered factories, cars with fuel. So why we shouldn't ban the factories or why we are not using the cars with electric? We should save the world and care it.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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