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It is thought by some that it’s better to live in a city while others believe that life is better in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#it’s #city #life #countryside
Generally, it's considered by fews that it's comfortable to live in urban areas while others think that
life
 is more relaxed in the rural areas.In my opinion
,
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 believe that
life
 in city side more beneficial and secure rather than village side. On the one hand, It's
is
Suggestion
been
 common believe of pupils that they feel secure in cities and spent a happy time with their families and friends, despite, these advantages lots of other facilities like best hospitals, schools, children's game clubs, shopping malls and beautiful visiting places,
however
, for children there are some special activities and functions arranged by many private, semi private and government sector institutes so teenager and adults
enjoy lot
Suggestion
enjoy a lot
enjoy lots
enjoy lots lots
.
On the other hand
, Village
life
is
Suggestion
is also hugging
also
 hug benefits, like fresh air without any mixture of pollution and poison
,
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,
they spent
there
of them or themselves
their
 most
life
 in fields because often there is
life
 totally depend on natural ingredients taken from cattle like cow milk and better
,
Accept space
,
despite, those advantages,
lot
Suggestion
lots
 of negative facts and lack of facilities no proper
awarenes
having knowledge of
awareness
 about health relative issues even no hospitals, educational institutes, community centres, play areas and
relaxe
become less tense, rest, or take one's ease
relax
relaxed
 enjoying places. In conclusion, living in urban areas
are
Suggestion
is
 more suitable rather
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 rural areas
beause
for the reason that; on account of
because
 of hug different
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
 in both sides.
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