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Some museums and art galleries charge admission fees, while others have free entry. Do you think the advantages of charging for admission outweigh the disadvantages?

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There is no doubt that,
since
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for
 several centuries, museums and
art
 galleries are the best places to learn from the history. The question is, should people buy tickets to enter to these places? Or it should be free? In
this
 essay I will discuss both sides and draw my personal conclusion. In terms of views, museums and galleries of
art
 are very valuable with many knowledge and information. Students and people could learn from it. The main reason given to support
this
 claim a recent study has made in Maastricht University. They found that when schools make trips for children to any museums or an
art
 gallery, children would be asking more questions about what they see there which increase the knowledge of the students. To illustrate, I remember when I was
at
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in
 the fourth grade, we had a lesson about the
second
 world war. I did not like the idea of just looking at the photos and read from my book.
Then
, I told my teacher about that, and she said that we will go to the museums to learn more about
this
 subject. I really enjoyed it and learned more about the history than at the class.
In other words
, if the entry to the museum was not free I could not pay the frees, because I was poor at that time.
This
 proves clearly that it is a good thing to have free museums.
However
, it should not be forgotten, that
art
 galleries and museums are the favourite places of the tourisms.
For example
, people come from all the world to visit the
art
 gallery
of
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in
 Paris. If the government charge admission fees, they will earn millions of dollars. And that will influence the economy of France.
Hence
 the belief that museums and galleries develop the countries. In conclusion, after a careful analysis of both views, I believe that governments should make museums and
art
 galleries free for schools and chare a fees entry for tourists.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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