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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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It is generally believed that, many people tend to run their own business
instead
 of working for as an employee. In my opinion, most of the people are dislike to be managed.
This
 essay will analyse why people prefer their entrepreneurship and the main downside of self-employed. People always dream of having an appropriate occupation for themselves.
First
 and foremost, one of the most prerequisites for obtaining an esteemed organization or well-paid job is high-education background and year of work experience so they are so time-constraint.
Second
, the younger desire to become rich in order to have a convenient
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
 in a short-period since some of jobs bring about noticeable profit for
employer
Suggestion
the employer
. There is some drawback of running own business.
To begin
 with, entrepreneur
need
Suggestion
needs
 a considerable money for the initial investment,
such
 as rent a premises, hire staffs, technicians and advertising that plays vital role in every company.
Moreover
, there are a lot of economic problems
such
 as economic depression, economic crisis, sanction that give rise to most of them go bankrupt after establishment. In conclusion, people
will to be
Suggestion
will be
 self-employed since not only can they have a prestigious job, but
also
 they can make a lot of money in a short-time.
Although
, some difficulties
such
 as losing a job may come up.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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