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Some people say that now we cans see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both these views and give your own opinions.

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A certain group of people
are
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is
 in
favor
promote over another
favour
 of watching movies on various electronic devices, whereas other individuals prefer to watch films in the movie
theatre
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. I am of the opinion that watching movies in
theatre
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gives
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give
 thrilling
experience
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 and feel of fulfilment.
This
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 essay shall delve into both the views. Few individuals prefer to watch movies in phones and tablets because they are comfortable at home and watching movies in devices comes with various features and functions. When people watch films at home, they can do so while lying on the floor, bed and sofa.
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, watcher can take multiple breaks during the movie without missing
small part
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a small part
 of it just by using the pause and play button of the device. These facilities are not possible when people watch movies in the
theatre
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.
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, there is another group of movie lovers who enjoy movies only if they watch it in the cinema
theatre
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 as it gives them great
experience
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 and joy. Watching films in the
theatre
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 gives
real feel
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a real feel
the real feel
 as the
theatre
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 have huge screens and great sound quality.
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, watching
superheroes
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superhero
 movies like batman, ironman, Antman in the
theater
a building where theatrical performances or motion-picture shows can be presented
theatre
 gives thrilling
experience
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 and feel of fulfilment.
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, people can get to share their
movie’s
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movie
 review and feedback with other audiences in the
theatre
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. To conclude, watching movies in
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theatre
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the theatre
 is more delightful and joyful. I am of the opinion that watching movies in
theatre
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 gives real
experience
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.
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, individuals are free from the various
disturbance
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disturbances
 that might happen
in
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at
 home.

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