In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping center or mall to do their shopping. Is this a positive or a negative development?

The
world is chancing always
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world is always changing
world is changing always
.When we are chancing
also
we are developing.
This
chancing has a some bad and good
sides
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side
.
However we
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However, we
have to
following
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follow
to
this
new world. If we want to sustain our power. In
recently search
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a recent search
recent search
says, people mostly preferring shopping to big mall or on
internet
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the internet
. But why? The retail sector relevant to advertisement and different options. If you are good at
this
point, you can catch the chance developing your business. Just consider about the all
advertisement
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advertisements
which you
seen
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have seen
saw
in one day. They always encourage to buy something. But from where? Frankly, from malls.
For example
, if you need
to
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for
a sugar or a
cellphone
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cell phone
. Which company name you remember instantly. Obviously the big and famous one. Because you can find whatever you need it.
This
situation actually good for use. Because we could save time and money.
Therefore
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Therefore, this
this
shopping
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
first
choice for the us. But the other side, the local shop
center
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Center
have been doing
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has been doing
this
occupation
from
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for
many years. But unfortunately they missed one and vital point. As I
told
being the one previously mentioned or spoken of
said
before
this
about different options and valuable price.
Therefore they
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Therefore, they
couldn’t keep the open to their business. If they want to turn their negative situation to positive
side they
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side, they
should deal with the big company. In conclusion, mall
instead
of the local
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
is an importing developing. Nowadays, depend on
this
malls
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mall's
life getting
be
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to be
effortlessly
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effortless
for new generation people. For examples, if you are mother and business woman and you have a restriction time for shopping, which side you do preferring? Even could be far obviously big mall
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
. Because of the different options.
Thus I
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Thus, I
supporting
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am supporting
support
this
big
malls
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mall
instead
of the small ones.
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