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Social media is becoming increasingly popular among st all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks. Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is no denying the fact that technological development has had a negative impact on the planet. Everything from the air we breathe to the food we eat is contaminated these days due to the use and abuse of various inventions of
technology
.
For example
, motor vehicles pollute the air. Pesticides contaminate the food we eat. Some people believe that the only way to reverse environmental
damage
 caused by
technology
 is to adopt a simple lifestyle. Others insist that
technology
 can undo the
damage
 caused by it. I agree with
this
 view. To start with, the argument that we all should now live a simpler life devoid of
technology
 is impractical. We are so habituated to having
technology
Suggestion
the technology
 in our
life
Suggestion
lives
 that it is now impossible to imagine a world without light bulbs, fans, refrigerators or computers. So, even if
technology
 is causing considerable environmental
damage
 it is impossible to convince people that they should stop using it. A better solution is to invest in greener technologies that can mitigate much of the environmental
damage
 already done. Scientists have already started working on them.
For example
, many trains now run on electricity. They cause much less pollution than diesel engines. Electric cars are another promising
technology
. It is safe to assume that in 10 or 15 years, they will completely replace cars running on fossil fuels.
Likewise
, greener energy sources like wind and solar may soon replace conventional energy sources like coal. To conclude, while it is true that
technology
 caused a great deal of
damage
 to the environment, it is
also
 quite capable of finding solutions to the problems it caused. As
technology
 continues to develop, I am sure it will become cleaner and greener.
Thus
 the argument that adopting a simple life is the only way to mitigate environmental
damage
 does not hold much water.

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