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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money, others argue that it is better to try and improve such situation. Discus both view d gives your opinion.

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Opinion
diverge
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diverges
 vastly on, it is better people consent the worse situation of their work or try to tackle with that and develop their
work
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working
 condition in the optimal way.
Although
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 many people think that acceptance a situation is a better, I would agree that
people most make
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most people make
 an effort to overcome miserable their living condition. On one hand, I comprehend why people believe that they are interested to keep their circumstances.
First
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, most of people come from a single-parent household and in many
countries
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country
country's
expenditure
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expenditures
 of
live
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life
 is very
high so
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high, so
 they have to work very hard to afford their
families
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family
family's
life
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, they have to carry
burden
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the burden
a burden
burdens
 of
life
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 and most of them have bank debts or monthly expenditure on children so it is very demanding to alter their occupation.
Secondly
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, some people do not have an enough self-assurance and
desire
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a desire
the desire
 to change their
job
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 position because they always fear being made redundant, they are rather reluctant to think
on
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about
 various financial issues and
they
of them or themselves
their
 habit of nine to 5 jobs.
On the other hand
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, I would side with those who think they should overcome a bad situation.
First
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, some people are very
optimism
Suggestion
optimistic
 and dream of having a comfortable
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life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
. They wanted to have a well-paid
job
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 with flexible time in order to have a lot of time for paying their recreational activities, they disgust from
hectic
Suggestion
a hectic lifestyle
hectic lifestyle
hectic lifestyles
life
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 style. They try to think out of
box
Suggestion
the box
. They hold the belief that extending their
job
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 help them to improve their horizon and they
make
engage in
do
 well-around about their
surrounding
the environmental condition
surroundings
 and they find an appropriate
job
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 for themselves. In conclusion, it appears to me that all the time people most make their effort to create a better
life
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 for themselves and
rise
raise the level or amount of something
raise
 the quality of their
life
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.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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