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Online education and training is becoming increasingly popular in the business world. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantage?

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In
this
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a school teaching mechanical and industrial arts and the applied sciences
tech
 savvy era, no one could escape from the influence of digital resources, as more and more companies tend to rely on digital training programs rather than traditional methods.It has sparked much debate in
society whether
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society, whether
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the pros
 and cons
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the
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 method in following paragraphs. To embark with the benefits of e- learning. The most prominent reason of shifting from an ancient
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technique
 to newest ones is the cost effective and time friendly, respectively.As it has become
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easier
 to attend online classes with own ease sans any difficult.An ample of organizations provide online courses to
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 employees in the pursuit of profit.
Moreover
, big beneficiaries of online training programs are manufacturers.Unlimited digital lessons comprising audio visual aids have significantly reduced the expenses of
business
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the business
a business
, mitigating the burden of pre training programs to workers before joining.
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First
 and foremost, communication has been decreased considerably among staff with the provision of internet.A good illustration can be observed in multinational companies
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,
where a good rapport is hard to find among colleagues which in turn lead to
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a lack
 of cooperation
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.
In addition
,
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,
essence of face to face interaction
can not
can not
cannot
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Group discussions, professional meetings and interview sessions are the greatest asset of any prestigious firm that play
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a vital role
 to lift up the team members.
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However
, these kind of services are not possible on
internet
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the internet
 at any cost. In conclusion, it is adequate to say that as " No rose without thorn",
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 technology has brought absolutely myriad techniques of development in business
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 yet it's negative outcomes
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Nevertheless
, the advantages of online coaching are far more than
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