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The qualities a person needs to become successful in today’s world cannot be learned at a university or similar academic institution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The goal of every high
school
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,
college
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, or graduate degree individual is to become successful in
life
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.
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, some practitioners of
success
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 theory believe that some skills for
success
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 cannot be addressed or acquired outside of
school
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. In fact,
this
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 is mainly true because sources outside of the realm
education
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 provide qualities
such
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 as
confidence
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 and social skills that universities are only now beginning to realize as important to teach. The better
position
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 up to a certain point is that there are many qualities of
success
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 acquired separately from
school
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 and most significant of
those
plural of "this"
these
 are
confidence
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 and social skills. As a starting point, we can certainly agree that parents enhance childhood
confidence
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 without any support from higher
education
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.
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 parent-driven
confidence
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 enables young adults to overcome challenges that could act as roadblocks for those solely dependent on an academic scholarship that doesn’t provide
this
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 character trait. Outside of
confidence
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 needs that universities don’t honestly address, problems solving learned from parents and moral leaders is a great social skill that creates
success
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 more than anything learned in a
college
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. One of the chief complaints from businesses around the world is that their new
college
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 hires lack problem-solving skills, and they are now demanding that they acquire them from sources unrelated to university
education
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.
Confidence
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 and social skills are vital
success
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 skills, but in today’s
education
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 environment, we cannot say that they are 100% unavailable in universities.
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TS) Albeit it a weaker
position
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, there is a minority viewpoint that would cause me hesitation in giving 100% support to the
position
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 stated in the previous paragraph (TS) As previously stated, I agree up to a point with the idea that specific
life
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 skills cannot be learned in university, but
this
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position
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 is not concrete in stone due to some of the changing attitudes in universities around the world.
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D#1) From the early 2000s onward, universities began to recognize that soft skills learned from everyday
life
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 are valuable companions to academic learning, so the
school
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 officials began offering one class that touched on these soft skills.
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,
this
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 one class is not as effective as the dedicated learning of qualities
such
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 as
confidence
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 and social skills that occur outside of universities. Higher
education
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 has not realized that students need reinforcement of these qualities throughout their
education
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, so that’s why the more
favorable
encouraging or approving or pleasing
favourable
position
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 is to almost completely agree with these skills not being able to be addressed in a
school
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 environment. Becoming a
success
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 in
life
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 is the ultimate goal of every man or woman, but many of us do not know the skills to be a
success
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. Many individuals think that we must go to
college
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 to learn everything to become successful, but
this
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 is not true.
Confidence
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 and social
skills create
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skills, create
 a successful
life
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 even though they are not absorbed from
school
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.

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