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Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion.

#people #children #home #child’s #development #school #methods
Home
 schooling has become very popular among families who doesn't trust the education system or have barriers that prevents their kids from joining schools. Some people believe that the advantages of
home
 teaching outweigh the
school
 ones, others believe that no alternative can replace the benefits of getting a traditional education. Personally, I strongly believe that studying at
house
Suggestion
the house
 is only for specific children and any ordinary child should join the
school
. In
this
 essay, we will discuss the advantages of
home
 teaching and the problems associated with it. It is no doubt that
home
 schooling can be tailored to suit the needs of any child and help him to maximise his learning and improve his skills.
Although
school
Suggestion
schools
the school
 can help children with social skills, it can
also
 expose them to bullying which is one of the major problems schools currently suffering from.
Moreover
, there is no pressure associated with studying with parents or familiar tutors where children can feel safer and more comfortable. Where schools can be an intimidating environment and will limit the ability to learn with shy children.
However
, schools are offering another type of skills that house cannot provide,
such
 as social skills and self-esteem. Usually parents tend to be protective and will limit their
children
Suggestion
children's
child's
 exposure to the world by forcing them to study at
house
Suggestion
a house
the house
. Whereas schools can put children in a competitive environment which can push them to perform better and learn more from their peers. All the above cannot be found in houses and
this
 can make the learning experience incomplete and not sufficient for a student. To conclude, in my opinion, unless there is a medical reason or force majure that oblige parents to
home
school
 their children, any child must join the
school
 and have a proper learning
expreience
the accumulation of knowledge or skill that results from direct participation in events or activities
experience
experiences
 including social skills and knowledge exchange.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • personalized learning
  • cater
  • flexible schedule
  • extracurricular activities
  • safe learning environment
  • bullying
  • peer pressure
  • socialization
  • diversity awareness
  • structured environment
  • discipline
  • punctuality
  • resources and facilities
  • communication skills
  • teamwork
  • specialized subjects
  • experts
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