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Some people think that having a set retirement age (e.g. 65 years) for everybody, regardless of occupation, is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age. Do you agree or disagree? Which types of workers do you think should benefit from early retirement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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So far, 65 years is the standard age of retirement, for every employee, without considering their occupation, which is injustice, asserted by folks as they consider, certain workers must get retirement and their savings early to the standard age. As I believe, to get retire before the
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 can be considerate in regards of duties,
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, if everyone has desires of early resting,
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 it seems quite unfair in perspective of discipline. Usually, soldiers are found in borders or in camps, despite of their homes throughout the whole
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 and on account of it, they deserve early relief from the services. While manifesting the norms, government ought to opine about job environment. Often, it is noticed that, every job has own traits, it could be amusing or stressful too. As I observed, many of the
adolecents
a juvenile between the onset of puberty and maturity
adolescents
 admit themselves, into the army enthusiastically, but by the
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, their
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 resort to a survival,
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, they keep catering the nation, regardless of their livings.
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 authorities ought to be considerate for their benefits.
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, plenty of working profiles are intriguing, and their facile and comfort style succour an employee, to touch the deadline of the working period, calmly. Nowadays, dancing and singing are one of those vocations, where entertainment industries could be cramped, with the talents, even after 65 years.
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, several artists remain employed into their passion for the lifetime,
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 being idle, before the age is not recommendable for all professionals. To conclude, taking release from the responsibilities, prior to the assigned
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 period could be acceptable for an
indivisual
a human being
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, only after analysing the degree of difficulties in their task. Labours, who might be eligible for prior relaxation can spend their
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 and wealth for their families, who always suffered during their tough
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 enthusiastically, but by the
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, their
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 resort to a survival,
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, they keep catering the nation, regardless of their personal
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 authorities ought to observe it.

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