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The bar graph below shows statistical data for applications at hospital emergency care departments sorted on the basis of
age
 groups.
The most
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The number
number
 of cases observed were by people aged 75 or above.The
second
 most cases were found for
population
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the population
populations
 who are under 5 years of
age
.
Age
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An age group
group
 of 16-44 and 65-74 had no significant difference in the cases and almost had
same
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a same number number
number
number
 of patients per 1000
population
.
Age
group
 65-74 was one of the
group
 with
least
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the least number
number
 of attendances followed by
age
group
 5-15 with
least
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the least number
number
 of attendances. Considering the figures, oldest
age
group
 of 75 years and above had 68 cases per 1000
population
 in December 2017 which shows there were 5 more cases in 2017 than in 2016.
On the other hand
,
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,
population
 under the
age
 of 5 had 52 cases per 1000
population
.
However
,
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,
there was
2 percent increase
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a 2 percent increase
 in the
number
 of cases in 2017.
Age
 groups of 65-74 and 16-44 had
same
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the same number
number
 of cases in 2016 with 31 cases each.
In addition
,
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,
they
also
 had almost same
number
 of cases in 2017 with
age
group
 of 65-74 having 33 cases which is just one more than
number
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the number
 of cases for 16-44.
Age
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An age group
group
 of 5-15 had
least
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the least number
number
 of cases per 1000 in 2016 with 21 cases and 23 cases in 2017.

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