Most societies has its homeless people. Some people think that the best way to help them is to give them money. To what extent do you agree?

The bar graph below shows statistical data for applications at hospital emergency care departments sorted on the basis of
age
groups.
The most
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The number
number
of cases observed were by people aged 75 or above.The
second
most cases were found for
population
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the population
populations
who are under 5 years of
age
.
Age
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An age group
group
of 16-44 and 65-74 had no significant difference in the cases and almost had
same
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a same number number
number
number
of patients per 1000
population
.
Age
group
65-74 was one of the
group
with
least
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the least number
number
of attendances followed by
age
group
5-15 with
least
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the least number
number
of attendances. Considering the figures, oldest
age
group
of 75 years and above had 68 cases per 1000
population
in December 2017 which shows there were 5 more cases in 2017 than in 2016.
On the other hand
,
Accept space
,
population
under the
age
of 5 had 52 cases per 1000
population
.
However
,
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,
there was
2 percent increase
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a 2 percent increase
in the
number
of cases in 2017.
Age
groups of 65-74 and 16-44 had
same
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the same number
number
of cases in 2016 with 31 cases each.
In addition
,
Accept space
,
they
also
had almost same
number
of cases in 2017 with
age
group
of 65-74 having 33 cases which is just one more than
number
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the number
of cases for 16-44.
Age
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An age group
group
of 5-15 had
least
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the least number
number
of cases per 1000 in 2016 with 21 cases and 23 cases in 2017.

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