You are living in an English speaking country and the restaurant near you is making a lot of noise. Write a letter to the restaurant owner. Cover the following: - tell restaurant owner to reduce the noise levels. - suggest a solution to fix the problem. - warn that if this problem remains not solved then further action will be taken.

Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Farrukh and I am
on
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an

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averseas
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overseas

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student from Pakistan studying
in
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at

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University
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the University

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of Melbourne in your city. I am writing
this
letter to request you to decrease the level of noise in your restaurant because it is causing a huge problem for the students of the nearby hostel. Let me explain it in detail. I am one of the students living in the hostel which is near to your hotel. I would like to inform you that
sound
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the sound

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system in your building is creating
problem
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a problem

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for us because it produces
such
a high noise that we are not able to focus on our subject.
Moreover
, it has
also
caused many of us to fell ill. I would suggest you
to
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apply

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order your staff to decrease the levels and number of speakers.
In addition
, concrete walls could be replaced by glass material which will help to control
this
issue. Unfortunately, if your employees do not accept it, we will complain
inthe
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in the

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local police station. Hoping for
a
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apply

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prompt action regarding
this
matter your
fatithfully
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faithfully
faithful

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farrukh
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Farrukh

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The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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