some people believe that young people know about international pop and movie stars but know very less about about famous people from the history in there own country. why is this? how can more interest be create in young people to gain more knowledge about thair own famous people from history?

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Due
to globalization, many foreign pop
musician
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musicians
and celebrity
are famous among the worldwide and young people follow
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are famous among the worldwide and young people following
have famous among the worldwide and young people followed
are famous among the worldwide and young people follow
them. Young people ill-informed about their own historical personalities.
This
essay will discuss why the influence of the modern generation on our
history
. And how to implement in
this
situation. The most prominent reason is that the education system in most countries is test-based. Students are a focus on how to get a good score in the exam and passing their exams, rather than deep knowledge about
this
topic. Their Interest in never
develop
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develops
to about the heroes of our past. In the technical
era
a particular geographical region of indefinite boundary (usually serving some special purpose or distinguished by its people or culture or geography)
area
in people do listen to music and watch movie
thus
, the interest in there. These celebrities are very
popular so
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popular, so
they become a role model of them.
sometimes
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Sometimes
parents are reasonable, where both are working so their children's education about
history
has taken a back seat.
On the other hand
, there are many methods that
can be develope
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can develop
can be develop
can be developed
interest about
history like,
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history, like
parents, media and school. The school can use an incorporate technology in teaching methods, like audio and graphical representation. Schools arrange an
education
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educational
trip to the historical place and museums and children get subsidizing in a ticket.
For example
, Gandhi Ashram has become a great source of information about how to live our father of the nation.
moreover
in addition
Moreover
, Director creates a movie on our historical personalities
For instance
, Jodha Akbar has a super hit in the box office. Parents give information on spending time about
history
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historical
places and nation
heros
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Heros
heroes
hero's
. At
last
, I would conclude there
are
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is
was
a lot of innovative methods to make more interest in
history
. Parents, school, and media
has
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have
a big role to play in extending
this
awareness.

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