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It is important that we maintain and protect the beautiful building of the past, even if it is expensive for countries to do so. Do you agree with this statement?

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Historical buildings are valuable treasures for a country and should be preserved even if the government needs to spend hefty amounts for it. I completely agree with
this
 viewpoint and my position is outlined in
this
 essay.
First
 of all, old and traditional buildings are of great architectural importance. Their sublime design attracts tourists and locals alike and is quite rare in modern structures. These historical edifices
also
 give us an opportunity to learn about the glorious past.
For example
, the Roman Colosseum in Rome not only shows how awe-inspiring the ancient architectures were but
also
 points out a massive arena used as a stadium for gladiators fighting and has space to house around 50,000 spectators in tiered seating.
This
 structure is a predominant representative of Roman culture and civilisation that modern historians cherish profoundly.
In addition
 to
this
, historical monuments
also
 serve as the tourist magnetism in many countries. In today's world, many people plan their vacations to places of historical importance as they are curious to know more about the culture and traditions of the past. Many nations are benefited by these tourists
as a result
, they possess booming tourism industry.
For instance
, millions of tourists, including international tourists visit Taj Mahal in India every year.
This
 provides the government with a huge profit and
also
 employs many locals,
thus
 assisting government financially. To conclude, I believe, it is worth spending money on ancient buildings as they not only possess historical importance but
also
 a financial kernel for many governments.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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