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the plants below show a public park when it first opend in 1920 and the same park today

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The given
map
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 indicates some information regarding the most significant metamorphosis have taken place in a public park
from
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since
 1920 so far. The
first
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 change witnessed is that, the state for museum has been
knock
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knocked
 down and replaced by
a
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an
 opulent amphitheatre for concert and
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 fountain has been demolished to make a way for construction of big rose
garden
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 that are surrounded by four seats. One of the smaller rose
garden
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 remains on the north part of the
map
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 Rose
garden
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 and pond for water plans that are situated in the right corner of the
map
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 was turned into cafe and children’s play area. In the
right corner bottom
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right bottom corner
 right of the
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 that used to be as glasshouse was converted into water feature,
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 a new entrance underground car par was added. The two small seats and rose
garden
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 has been removed from the southern part of the
map
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