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Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is by reducing the maximum speed limits on vehicles, others think there are other better ways. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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The issue of
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safety
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 is one of great concern,
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 worthy to note that a lot a people have varied opinion about how
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safety
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 can be improved by reducing the maximum limits on vehicles. I have been opportune to interview some of colleagues at the just concluded
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 week in my organisation, while a good number of colleagues felt that reducing the maximum limits
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 the vehicle will help improve
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, a three-quarter of those interviewed insisted that there are better measures. The need to reduce maximum limits of vehicles will have some positive effects on
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, as vehicles will not be able speed as much as do on the highway as well as residential areas but what about areas where drivers will not
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 for going over the limits. For
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,
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 more the actual speed of a vehicle can only be ascertained by the driver.
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 are better options to improve
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for example
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, extending the use of traffic lights, speed cameras, speed breakers, increase the number of traffic officials, speed limits signage, hourly traffic report on radio and television and online. These other factors will enhance the
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 and reduce maximum limits, and in an event that
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 limits are not adhered to disciplinary actions will be taken. In my opinion,
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 agree that these other factors will ensure
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 other than the reduction of maximum limits on vehicle.
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