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Both the poor and the rich find accessibility into university difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that gaining access into the university is tasking for both the well-to-do and the poor.
This
 essay agrees that the wealthy and the less-privileged face challenges securing entrance into colleges.
This
 is so because universities give admission on merit and
also
 the number of spaces available is far less than the total number of applicants
Firstly
, one major criterion for university entry is academic merit. Regardless of how much money students have, their grades have to be of a minimum standard, depending on the course of choice, before being considered for a slot in the school. The college administration has no
first
-hand information of the financial buoyancy of the students, admissions are handed out solely based on examination results of the students.
For example
, in Nigeria, admission criteria for all universities are based on two examinations WAEC and JAMB and the cutoff marks vary, depending on the course of study. Medicine and accounting
for instance
 stand at 80% and 50% respectively.
Secondly
, the number of available spaces in the universities is limited in comparison to the amount of students that apply. There are massive amounts of students sending out an application to colleges every year,
this
 includes the children from affluent homes and those that are not, but unfortunately, the capacity of the schools in regards to infrastructure are not many.
As a result
 of
this
, there is an equal reduction in the chances of both groups of people gaining entrance into these schools.
For example
, in 2019, Nigeria witnessed 66,000 university applicants, but only 30000 students were taken which accounts for just 45% of all the applicants. In conclusion, the people that are financially buoyant face the same difficulty as those who are not in order to secure a seat in colleges and
this
 is due to the fact that they both have to succeed academically to make the merit list and
also
 face the challenge of inadequate availability of spaces in the schools.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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