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The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table describes the details of
subway
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the subway
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railway
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 system which is operated in six main cities, namely London, Paris, Tokyo, Washington DC, Kyoto and Los Angeles.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the oldest underground
railway
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is
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in
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London
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in London
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 which covers
the
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a
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 larger distance of
route
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the route
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 when compared to the other cities’
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railway
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railways
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.
Also
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, the subway
railway
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 system in Tokyo carries
the
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a
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 greater number of
the
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apply
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people than that of
in
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the other four countries.
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London
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the London
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railway
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 began to function in 1863, even though it was built
long
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a long
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 time back, that has
an
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the
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 ability to run around 394 km, which is the greatest distance and
also
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 it carries the
third
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 highest number of
the
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apply
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passenger per year, at 775
million
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. Tokyo’s subway
railway
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 comes to
top
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the top
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 in terms of carrying
number
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a number
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 of passengers per year, at 1927
million
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 and it was followed by Paris, at 1191
million
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 people.
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,
although
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 Los Angeles built the underground
railway
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 in 2001, it can able to travel around 28 km and transport only 50
million
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travelers
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travellers
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 annually.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words railway, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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