In some countries fast food restaurant and supermarket give money to school to promote their products do you think this is a positive or negative development

School
are
place
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a place
the place
places
in which a child can lead into
the good
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the best
manner.
in
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In
many countries, restaurant and malls give funds for the product promotion to
school
.
However
,
school
are not medium for advertising of goods. I think
this
is affirmative for
school but
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school, but
it is contradictory for children.
there
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There
are many restaurants and malls are available in political territory that persuade the
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
for promoting their business. They invest money
for
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in
school
development in which
school
can hire qualified teachers for the students as well as they can add number of books
into
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in
library
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the library
libraries
and
also
improve the gadget of
college preparatory
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the college preparatory school
the college preparatory School
a college preparatory School
School
that are beneficial for growing the children in
educational field
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the educational field
.
Moreover using
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Moreover, using
funds which are provided by owner of hotels and motels,
School
can give an opportunity to child for scholarships that can helpful to the needed persons
;
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;
however
, a child can learn in negatively. They put their pressure to the parents if they
are not afforded
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have not afforded
do not afford
it.
For example
, video system for study are influenced by
kids but
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kids, but
a
parents
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parent
are not afforded
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is not afforded
are not affording
is not affording
it. It
create
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creates
a negative impact on kids. Malls and hotel are ever increasing problem which
are
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is
harmful for people. Some goods are causes of unhealthy and people are introduced by illness and disease.
For example
junk food
,
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,
meanwhile
,
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,
is directly
influence
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influenced
by the
kids which
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kids, which
put them
in
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on
health issues.
Government
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The government
of
country
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the country
a country
create
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creates
a list of goods that are not harmful for people and
also
restricted some unhealthy advertisement.
overall
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Overall
, hotels and malls should provide money for the development purpose rather than promoting the on product or good.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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