Nowadays, young people communicate with friends and family mostly through social networking sites, rather than other ways of communication like talking on the phone or face to face. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

In the past few
years
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years,
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social
media
websites and apps
such
as
Facebook
and Twitter have become hugely popular with the youth.
While
using these
sites
has many benefits
such
as being efficient and enjoyable, they
also
have a few drawbacks which
overall
makes
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make
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this
development a bad one. Using apps like
Facebook
and Twitter
are
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a convenient and fun way to talk with
friends
and family members.
Instead
of phoning someone and hoping they aren’t busy, sending messages through these apps can be a better option as the person can receive the notification when they are free and respond in a timely manner.
Also
, most
people
are very busy these days so often can’t answer their
phone
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phones
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or meet
friends
for a coffee or
face to
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face-to-face
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face
chat. By using Twitter and similar
sites
, we can still keep in touch with our
friends
often even if they are far away. These
sites
are often enjoyable to use as well.
In addition
to chatting, we can send pictures, videos and funny messages to our
friend
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friends
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, which strengthen friendship bonds and
thus
lead to better relationships.
However
, there are negative aspects of using social
sites
as the main way to communicate and I believe these far outweigh the benefits mentioned above.
First,
if we only chat using these
sites
we can lose our ability to interact well with others
face
to
face
.
This
can cause
people
to feel depressed, lonely and have mental issues as
human
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humans
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are inherently social creatures who need more interaction than social
media
sites
provide.
Furthermore
, the type of interaction is not intimate. When we meet
face
-to-
face
, we can really feel the emotions of others and can connect strongly resulting in far stronger relationships.
However
, via social
media
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the interaction is far colder and can result in artificial relationships.
For instance
, many
people
have 500 plus
Facebook
friends
but they don’t actually know these
people
well or ever meet them for a coffee or meal.
Thus
, these types of
friends
and interactions are not sufficient and surely not
a
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adequate replacement for
face to
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face-to-face
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face
meetings. To close,
while
there are some benefits of social
sites
such
as being convenient and fun to use, we should not ignore the
drawback
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drawbacks
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discussed above. I recommend that
people
make sure to communicate with their loved ones via the phone and in person not only via social
media
sites
like
Facebook
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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