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The internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are. On the other hand, it also isolates us and encourages people not to socialise.

#internet #matter #hand #people #socialise
In
this
 contemporary era, I completely agree that
internet
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the internet
 plays
major role
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a major role
 in our
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
. There are so much information available
in
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on
 the internet, all people are addicted to social networks.
Firstly
, all are using Television like basic need. Nowadays, we
can not
can not
cannot
 find a house without television all kinds of people are watching regularly. In television there are so many individual channels like comedy, news, movies and sports etc. In school, teachers are using
Powerpoint
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PowerPoint
 presentations and some technology to educate children in a
best
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good
better
 way.
Secondly
, people are connecting with the use of social networking sites like
facebook
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Facebook
,
watsapp
 and
instagram
 etc.
For example
, we are connecting our childhood friends merely by their name even though we are not in a same place. There are
plethora
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a plethora
 of applications and websites are available in our current market.
Internet
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The internet
 is not only for
entertainment but
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entertainment, but
also
 for
education we
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education, we
 are using so many useful applications,
websites
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web sites
.
For instance
, if you search for a job there are so many websites like Linkedin, Indeed, Monster etc. The Internet
is not permitted only
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is not only permitted
for
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in
 developed cities, very
less period
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least period
 of time it is available in rural areas
also
. To recapitulate, with the support of
internet
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the internet
 we are communicating all over the world irrespective of age. The Internet makes our life easier and
also
 we are socializing easily irrespective of time, gender and age.

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