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Excessive traffic has made cities unpleasant laces to live and work in, private cars should be completely banned from city centers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Traffic
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 makes life hell. Nowadays, most of the families own one or more cars, which will be the main cause of
traffic
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 in cities. I agree that many private cars on the road means more
traffic
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, but I disagree that private cars banning from the city centre. Government can encourage the public to
use
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 a mass
transportation
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 like car pooling, trains, and busses.
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, if we have neighbours who work in a same company or some other company which is nearby,
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 we can
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 any one of their cars to reach destination. So, it helps to reduce the number of cars on the road which ultimately leads to the less
traffic
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 when everybody thinks like that.
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, the Government should provide public
transportation
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 like busses and trains more frequently.
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 to that, they should increase the number of transportations according to public requirement as well as they maintain it regularly. So, people like to
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 public
transportation
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, which will be cheap and comfortable.
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, spending money on buying cars is more expensive than using public
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 and it will be more comfortable and relaxing if we just sit
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 of driving our own car. Banishing private cars will not be a reasonable act on public because they may get any emergency when they cannot get the public
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 as needed.
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, the government cannot just take the decision on behalf of everybody without their concern which will lead to
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 problems.
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 of that, if government educates public to
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 mass
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 like car pooling, busses and cars, which ultimately solves the problem of
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 in city centres.

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