Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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, many successful

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earn millions of dollars through various sources by endorsing brands and high salaries.

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is not the scenario in other sectors. Some

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believe that

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is entirely fair

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others think that it is not acceptable.

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of the

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in depth and will draw a possible conclusion with my opinion. First of all, some are of

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that the huge amount of money earned by top

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is fully justified when

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to other vocations.These

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have reasons to believe that

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in order to become a successful

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one needs to be more dedicated throughout his sporting career.

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, the length of

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the earning

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period is minimal than other jobs.

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, many

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young age

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as injuries,

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endurance.

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, earning more money through various sources is right

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some

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, there is a common belief that it is biased by paying more for

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than other important professions like doctors,

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and scientists

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. They contribute most of their innovations and creative thinking to help societies across the world. Even though

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these professionals work more hours than

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they are getting paid less.

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, individuals in these sectors need to work throughout their entire life to survive, which is not the case in terms of

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professionals.

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, many

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are struggling. In conclusion,

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it is a common thought that fortunate sports individuals are paid

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than other crucial jobs. I believe that the length of

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the earning

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period is

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longer

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for other vocations

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as doctors

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it is minimal for

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. Personally, I think that it is entirely necessary to pay for successful sporting individuals as their career is short when compared to other jobs.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction
Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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307 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

financial remuneration
exceptional
merit
talent
demand
entertainment value
career span
physical demands
justified
unfair
criticism
income inequality
societal priorities
sportsmanship

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Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

in some cities, people are choosing cars instead of bicycles, while in other cities riding bikes is which development do you think is better?replacing cars. why is this the case?

some people spend most of their time lives living close to where they born.what are the reasons and explain advantage and disadvantage

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Some people think that spending a lot on holding wedding parties, birthday parties and other celebrations is just a waste of money. Others, however, think that these are necessary for individuals and the society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.