We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in business, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we be more suspicious of their benefits?

Computers are used in business, hospitals, crime detection and even flying planes,
as a
result we
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result, we
are increasingly becoming more reliant on computers. The
future
application of computers will be
enorrmous
extraordinarily large in size or extent or amount or power or degree
enormous
,
however in
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however, in
the immediate
future
they will be used in intelligent systems and embedded systems which help to improve the
lifestyle
of
human race
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the human race
. The use of computers can highly benefit the
man kind
all of the living human inhabitants of the earth
mankind
. In the immediate
future
, computers will form part of intelligent systems and embedded system for improvement of human
lifestyle
. The computers, today are highly powerful,
as a result
the new artificial intelligence is being used to solve several problems, which were highly unsolved till now. The combination of
such
intelligent computing with embedded systems in various gadgets will highly automate, almost everything, thereby reducing human effort, increasing efficiency, increasing health and life expectancy, etc.
For example
, programmed computers are replacing the age old medicating systems and are being able to forecast diseases by reading human genome. People will be highly
benefitted
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benefited
by the application of computers. Starting from virtual assistance, medical assistance, forecasting of weather and crop growths, which will not only increase the health of
individual
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the individual
individuals
an individual
but
also
boost the economy and
lifestyle
of people.
For example
, satellites today can predict and forecast not only rain or the weather, but
also
natural hazards like cyclone,
as a result
gives a window to the disaster mitigation teams and thereby saves thousands of lives. Our
dependance
the state of relying on or being controlled by someone or something else
dependence
on computers is increasing, as they
are used in everywhere
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are used everywhere
from business, hospitals, crime detection and even flying planes. Computers will be used to develop intelligent and embedded devices that help to increase the human
lifestyle
in
future
. Mankind will be
tremondously
extremely
tremendously
benefitted
by
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from
the use of computers.

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