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It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Do you agree or disagree?

#children #countryside #city
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Over the
last
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 few centuries, many people have been migrating from the
country side
rural regions
countryside
 to a big
city
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 for better opportunities in employment, better lifestyle and
also
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 to provide their kids with
quality
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a quality education
education
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. There is a neutral opinion about children growing up in
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countryside
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the countryside
 or in a big
city
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. Each has its own share of perks and cons. When a
child
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 grows in the
countryside
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, there are more connected to nature and lead a healthier lifestyle as compared to the children growing in a
city
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. The
countryside
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 has less pollution, less distractions like a mall or gadgets where they could just waste time. The other reason why a
child
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 needs to experience rural area is due to its zero to almost no pollution free environment. Due to
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, they are more healthy. There are definitely some downsides for the children who grown in the
countryside
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 like no proper exposure and less quality of
education
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.
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, the children who are brought up in large cities have more exposure, better quality of
education
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 and
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 ready to face any kind of challenges. The downside may include excess pollution, no greenery to experience. They are more likely prone to technology and
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 more distractions. Overall, it all depends on the parent's perspective on whether their
child
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 must be brought up in the
countryside
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 or a big
city
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. If the parent wants their
child
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 to enjoy life without much
tensions
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tension
,
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 the better option would be the country.
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 the other hand, if the parent wishes to provide the
child
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 with proper
education
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 and want them to face the harsh world, a
city
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 would be a great choice.

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