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Nuclear technology not only offers a lot of advantages but also threatens the world with its danger. The use of this technology should be discouraged. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Living in a nuclear
power
 country, I understand how valuable nuclear
technology
 is despite its dire consequences.
Therefore
, I cannot support the idea of avoiding
this
technology
 because of its contribution to energy, medical science, and peace. At the outset, nuclear
technology
 can make a great contribution to the
power
 sector. Unlike other sources of
power
 generation, nuclear
power
 not only provides substantial energy at minimum
cost but
Suggestion
cost, but also
also
, does not escalate the catastrophic environmental effects of global warming.
As a result
, the countries suffering from energy crises, where the constant and uninterrupted
power
 supply is a challenge, may be able to deal with the problem by using
this
technology
 without being overburdened or victims of an unhealthy environment.
Similarly
, nuclear
technology
 has brought a revolution in medical science. Diagnostic as well as the treatment process has become somewhat reliable. Cancer,
for instance
, is now curable due to the advent of
this
technology
 and the patients are surviving
this
 fatal disease and coming back to a normal life that would not have been possible without the advent of
this
 miraculous
technology
.
Finally
, nuclear weapons, the end products of nuclear
technology
, are maintaining peace in the
world
. These nukes are more lethal than conventional warheads that can cause massive devastation, but
this
 fear of their destruction helps maintain peace in the
world
. Since the detrimental effects of
World
 War II, the
world
 has not witnessed another
world
 war and there is the remotest chance of another global war. In conclusion, I think nuclear
technology
 is viable and
reliable
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reliable, hence
hence
 its existence is vital for the
world
 when it comes to making lives brightened, serving humanity and protecting them. I hope
this
technology
 will continue to grow in
years
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the years
 to come to provide people with more benefits.

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