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The breakthroughs in medical science are by far the most significant advances in world society over the last two centuries. Discuss this statement and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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Over the
last
two
 hundred years, there have been many changes
to
Suggestion
in
 society in nearly all aspects of people’s lives. Medical science has advanced beyond recognition and it can be argued that
this
 has been the most significant change. The
last
two
 centuries have witnessed great advances of the industrial revolution. Automation, machinery and various technologies have revolutionised the way people live, work, play and travel. Society has now many things that make people’s lives easier and more enjoyable, including cars, planes, computers and telephones to name only a few. It is quite clear that these advances are phenomenally significant in most people’s lives today. Medical science has
also
 been revolutionised. The three principal challenges facing surgery, which were pain, infection and bleeding, have all been overcome, allowing the lives of millions to be saved. The discoveries of vaccines to deal with the great killer diseases of history
also
 took place over the
last
two
 centuries. Probably billions of people who would have died from diseases
such
 as smallpox, tuberculosis, diphtheria and tetanus have all been saved.
In addition
 to
this
, medicine now has
such
 an advanced knowledge of human body systems that doctors can cure or heal a wide range of ailments that would in the past have been fatal or extremely debilitating. It is
also
 likely that the
next
 century will see similar significant advances. In conclusion,
although
 there have been many different advances in society over the
last
two
 hundred years, the fact that so many people have had their lives saved or improved by medical breakthroughs makes it seem incontrovertible that it is these medical advances that have been the most significant.

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