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Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#value
Past
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The past
 is always the past for the things which went wrong in the past. But based on the old
experience
 we can live
better
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a better life
the good life
the best life
life
 in the present. I agree
for
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in
 some instances Learning about the past has no value but not for all. In
this
 essay, I will explain about the reasons to support my opinion
on based on my
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based on my
 knowledge. As per my
experience
 there
is
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were
 good and bad things in the past. Coming
to
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into
 good situations in the past
is become
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was becoming
was become
 memories in the present
life
. Whenever people
feels
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feel
 they are not
comfort
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comfortable
 for the day they can grab those thoughts and come back easily.
For example
, whenever
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 have felt got stressed
then
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 close my eyes and remember my kid smile. It gives
boostup
Suggestion
boost up
 to me and helpful to get better thoughts. On the other side, the bad things
happend
come to pass
happened
 in the past some of them are
need
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needed
 to erase from the brain And few of them we can use to avoid those in the coming days. The people have to realize the situation and have to decide which one has to
carrry
move while supporting, either in a vehicle or in one's hands or on one's body
carry
curry
 forward and which are not.If
yoiu
second person pronoun; the person addressed
you
 want to recall the
life
 from the bad situation there are two ways.
Firstly
, forget about that and start
new
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a new life
new lives
life
.
Secondly
, Use that thing as
a
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an
experience
 and
buid
make by combining materials and parts
build
 your
life
 on top of it.
Like wise
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Likewise
second
 point
happend
come to pass
happened
 in my
life
.I was failed in the Intermediate education and all of my relatives smiled
on
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in
at
 my face even the people who
has not cleared
Suggestion
have not cleared
 their tenth standard questioned me. In the
second
 attempt
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 have completed the exam.Later
on my
Accept comma addition
on, my
 studies
when ever
at whatever time
whenever
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 go for the exam
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 just remind
my self
reflexive form of "me"
myself
 about my bad
experience
 and use that to succeed in other studies.I did complete all my studies with no backlogs after my Intermediate
edcuation
the activities of educating or instructing; activities that impart knowledge or skill
education
. In conclusion, As per my
experience
 and
knowledge no
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knowledge, no
 need to remove all the things happened in the past in the present. Decide the things which will helpful to handle
situation
Suggestion
the situation
situations
a situation
 in the future and take them with you in the present.

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