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By punishing murderers with death penalty, society is also guilty of committing murder. Therefore, life in prison is a better punishment for murderers. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Death
penalty
 as a means of
punishment
 for people who commit murder is highly debatable. Some people believe the society is
also
culpable
(usually followed by 'of') having capacity or ability
capable
 of the same crime by enforcing
death
Suggestion
the death penalty
penalty
on
Suggestion
for
 murderers and view
life
 imprisonment as a better
punishment
.
This
 essay will argue why
life
 in prison is in fact a better means of
punishment
 than
death
Suggestion
the death penalty
penalty
. Reform, it would seem, is the essence of
punishment
. Most people often become remorseful after committing
offenses
a lack of politeness; a failure to show regard for others; wounding the feelings or others
offences
 and punishments, more often than not, serves as a means of reforming these offenders.
This
 would appear to be defeated by enforcing
death
Suggestion
the death penalty
penalty
 as
a
Suggestion
an
 outfit
murderers
Suggestion
murderer
.
For example
, studies have shown that
death
Suggestion
the death penalty
penalty
 has not been effective as a means of
punishment
 for murderers and
in deed
in truth (often tends to intensify)
indeed
,
life
 imprisonment has shown better results.
This
 is probably because sentencing a murderer to
life
 in prison gives him a chance at introspection and remorse. It is understandable why some people may
clamor
make loud demands
clamour
 for
death
penalty
 as they might have suffered the loss of a loved one from the hands of a murderer.
However
, the society cannot claim to be fair and just if they take away a person’s chance at correcting his mistakes which a
death
penalty
 seem to obviate. To summarize,
punishment
Suggestion
the punishment
 for committing murder seems to be a tricky and sensitive issue.
However
, offering a chance for the offender to acknowledge and correct his mistakes would appear to be fair and just rather than killing the murderer.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • capital punishment
  • irreversible
  • deterrence
  • rehabilitation
  • human rights
  • ethical dilemma
  • state-sponsored
  • vindicate
  • incarceration
  • due process
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