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Today's teenagers have more stressful lives than previous generations. Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

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One of
the most debatable
Suggestion
the most debated
 issues in the
last
 decade has been the amount of
stress
 teenagers are dealing with. Some people believe that due to improved state funding and family
support
, young people
nowadys
the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
nowadays
 are less stressful than
previuos
just preceding something else in time or order
previous
 generations.
In contrast
, others think that with todays new media and social changes, teenagers are exposed to higher social pressure and criticism, which creates substantially more emotional
stress
. I believe that both social and
economical
Suggestion
economic
 changes create new
challanges
take exception to
challenges
 to teenagers, and
as a result
 teenagers nowadays have a more stressful life. In the following essay, I will elaborate on both opinions, as well as mine. Financial
support
 during high school and collage, is probably one of the most
imprtant
of great significance or value
important
 factors causing
stress
 among young students. In previous years, many families were unable to pay university funds and
support
 the
childs
Suggestion
child's
children
child
children's
 needs.
As a result
, teenagers were forced to work while studying, which had a great impact on their life and leisure time.
Nowadys
Suggestion
Nowadays
, government funds and improved
socio-economic
involving social as well as economic factors
socioeconomic
 status of many families allow teenagers to focus entirely on their education, without the need to worry about financial
support
. According to the New York Times, financial security is the most
imprtant
of great significance or value
important
 aspect leading to
stress
 related
illnessess
impairment of normal physiological function affecting part or all of an organism
illnesses
illness
 among teenagers, and
this
 has been reduced by 30% since the introduction of educational state
fuds
assets in the form of money
funds
.
This
 illustrates, that
teeangers
a juvenile between the onset of puberty and maturity
teenagers
 in previous years were exposed to higher levels of
stress
 as opposed to
currrent
a flow of electricity through a conductor
current
 days.
In contrast
 to the above mentioned, financial globalization and immigration creates a fierce competition among teenagers and young students, in an attempt to gain better educational
oportunities
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
. While in previous years teenagers had to compete with other local students for a position in a lucrative university,
such
 as Harvard, Yale and Oxford, today students need to overcome teenagers from all over the world.
Furthermore
, many of these students remain in the country after graduation, which decrease job vacancies in fields
such
 as marketing, banking and computer science even more.
Consequently
, teenagers nowadays are required to study harder in order to succeed, leading to higher
stress
. In conclusion,
teenagres
a juvenile between the onset of puberty and maturity
teenagers
 today are exposed to higher
stress
 than previously, due to changes associated with globalization and immigration. I believe these changes
creates
Suggestion
are creating
have created
are created
 harder
challanges
take exception to
challenges
 to teenagers than before, and force them to address issues
such
 as profession and career much earlier.
Consequently
,
teenagres
a juvenile between the onset of puberty and maturity
teenagers
 today have a more
stresful
extremely irritating to the nerves
stressful
 life.
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