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Today's teenagers have more stressful lives than previous generations. Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

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One of
the most debatable
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the most debated
 issues in the
last
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 decade has been the amount of
stress
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 teenagers are dealing with. Some people believe that due to improved state funding and family
support
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, young people
nowadys
the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
nowadays
 are less stressful than
previuos
just preceding something else in time or order
previous
 generations.
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, others think that with todays new media and social changes, teenagers are exposed to higher social pressure and criticism, which creates substantially more emotional
stress
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. I believe that both social and
economical
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economic
 changes create new
challanges
take exception to
challenges
 to teenagers, and
as a result
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 teenagers nowadays have a more stressful life. In the following essay, I will elaborate on both opinions, as well as mine. Financial
support
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 during high school and collage, is probably one of the most
imprtant
of great significance or value
important
 factors causing
stress
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 among young students. In previous years, many families were unable to pay university funds and
support
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 the
childs
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child's
children
child
children's
 needs.
As a result
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, teenagers were forced to work while studying, which had a great impact on their life and leisure time.
Nowadys
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Nowadays
, government funds and improved
socio-economic
involving social as well as economic factors
socioeconomic
 status of many families allow teenagers to focus entirely on their education, without the need to worry about financial
support
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. According to the New York Times, financial security is the most
imprtant
of great significance or value
important
 aspect leading to
stress
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 related
illnessess
impairment of normal physiological function affecting part or all of an organism
illnesses
illness
 among teenagers, and
this
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 has been reduced by 30% since the introduction of educational state
fuds
assets in the form of money
funds
.
This
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 illustrates, that
teeangers
a juvenile between the onset of puberty and maturity
teenagers
 in previous years were exposed to higher levels of
stress
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 as opposed to
currrent
a flow of electricity through a conductor
current
 days.
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 to the above mentioned, financial globalization and immigration creates a fierce competition among teenagers and young students, in an attempt to gain better educational
oportunities
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
. While in previous years teenagers had to compete with other local students for a position in a lucrative university,
such
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 as Harvard, Yale and Oxford, today students need to overcome teenagers from all over the world.
Furthermore
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, many of these students remain in the country after graduation, which decrease job vacancies in fields
such
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 as marketing, banking and computer science even more.
Consequently
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, teenagers nowadays are required to study harder in order to succeed, leading to higher
stress
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. In conclusion,
teenagres
a juvenile between the onset of puberty and maturity
teenagers
 today are exposed to higher
stress
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 than previously, due to changes associated with globalization and immigration. I believe these changes
creates
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are creating
have created
are created
 harder
challanges
take exception to
challenges
 to teenagers than before, and force them to address issues
such
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 as profession and career much earlier.
Consequently
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,
teenagres
a juvenile between the onset of puberty and maturity
teenagers
 today have a more
stresful
extremely irritating to the nerves
stressful
 life.
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