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Wealth does not necessarily guaranty happiness. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Provide reasons for your answer. Include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

#wealth #guaranty #happiness
Many people 
belives
accept as true; take to be true
believe
 that wealth brings more happiness and others tend to
belives
accept as true; take to be true
believe
 in the opposite side that
money
 is not a key to a happier
life
. My opinion will advocate the
second
 believe that
money
 is not a key to a happier
life
 in many different ways which we will discuss in passages. There are several reasons for
this
.
First
 of all,  Folks who think that more
money
 makes
life
 easier might do not know about more
money
also
 brings tons of stress with it
such
 as how to manage or fear losing it from close friends or business partners, etc.
This
 stressful condition
also bring
Suggestion
also brings
 some
chronics
being long-lasting and recurrent or characterized by long suffering
chronic
 diseases and other health issues.
Secondly
, sometimes wealthy people do act very strange about
money which
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money, which
 might weird for other individuals it's hard to
say but
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say, but
 even having ample of
money
 they pretend to be very mean about it and save a single penny from where ever they can possibly.
Moreover
,
money
also
 brings some bad habits
such
 as gambling, drugs,
etc which
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etc., which
etc. which
 can have a detrimental effect on an individual.  In conclusion, We understand from above paragraphs that
money
 can not
by
obtain by purchase; acquire by means of a financial transaction
buy
 happiness always it do come with some
consequence but
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consequence, but
 folks who do
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
 in simple
life even
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life, even
 they have
money
 but still believe in simplicity will live
better
Suggestion
the good
life
 and enjoy each moment without getting
stress
Suggestion
stressed
.

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