Wealth does not necessarily guaranty happiness. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Provide reasons for your answer. Include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Many people 
belives
accept as true; take to be true
believe
 that wealth brings more happiness and others tend to
belives
accept as true; take to be true
believe
in the opposite side that
money
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is not a key to a happier
life
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. My opinion will advocate the
second
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believe that
money
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is not a key to a happier
life
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in many different ways which we will discuss in passages. There are several reasons for
this
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.
First
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of all,  Folks who think that more
money
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makes
life
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easier might do not know about more
money
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also
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brings tons of stress with it
such
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as how to manage or fear losing it from close friends or business partners, etc.
This
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stressful condition
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also bring
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also brings
some
chronics
being long-lasting and recurrent or characterized by long suffering
chronic
diseases and other health issues.
Secondly
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, sometimes wealthy people do act very strange about
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money which
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money, which
might weird for other individuals it's hard to
say but
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say, but
even having ample of
money
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they pretend to be very mean about it and save a single penny from where ever they can possibly.
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,
money
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also
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brings some bad habits
such
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as gambling, drugs,
etc which
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etc., which
etc. which
can have a detrimental effect on an individual.  In conclusion, We understand from above paragraphs that
money
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can not
by
obtain by purchase; acquire by means of a financial transaction
buy
happiness always it do come with some
consequence but
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consequence, but
folks who do
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
in simple
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life even
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life, even
they have
money
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but still believe in simplicity will live
better
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the good
life
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and enjoy each moment without getting
stress
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stressed
.

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