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Nowadays in many countries women have full time jobs. Therefore it is logical to share household tasks evenly between men and women. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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In
this
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 modern era, the number of women working full-time is increasing at a great pace. It is widely believed that
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 chores should be distributed equally among male and female partners’. In my opinion, I strongly agreed that men should give their hand to women in
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 activities for reducing the burden on women and promote gender equality. To being with, it is unfair to impose all
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work
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 on women as their role in the present time has changed significantly. Since it becomes very difficult for
single wage-earner
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a single wage-earner
 to support family, The majority of females have sought a full-time job to supplement their
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 income.
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, If the
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 should be shared equally among partners’ than females should
also
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 enjoy their life and live happily with their families.
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, the people of India
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 cooperatively and complete all
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 chores on time so that they can spend quality time with each other.
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, splitting
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 duties evenly can successfully create a gender-equal environment for strong support and respect for each other. If parents share their daily responsibilities, they are able to can convey a storing
message
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messages
 to their children that women and females are not
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synonymous
 with households and by helping them we can show our love and support to our beloved family.
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, by helping his wife do the dishes, a husband can let her know how much he loves her. To conclude, I strongly believe that by splitting
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 chores equally, it not only reduces the burden of female partners’ but
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 helps gender equality.
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, it is advisable for both
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genders
 to share domestic
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.
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