Some people think that sport teaches children how to compete, while other believe that children learn teamwork. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There are different opinion regarding the benefits of sports. Some think it
boost
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boosts
boosted
the
team
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spirit whereas
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spirit, whereas
others think it create
sense
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a sense
of
competion
a deep awareness of and sympathy for another's suffering
compassion
completion
competence
in children.
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posing no difficulty; requiring little effort
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opines that students receive both the benefits from participating in sports activities. The
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assay
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will
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discuss adolescents learning their strength and weakness through
competion
a concluding action
completion
competition
compassion
, followed by
team
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cooperation leading to achievement of goals. One of the significant benefits of sports is learning the importance of competition. Competing is
key activity
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a key activity
the key activity
of playing sports. Only
thourgh
(postpositive) however
though
it the games will be fulfilled. The sports prepare the young adult for the any competition that they will have to face in
future
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the future
by making them know
thier
of them or themselves
their
own strength and weakness
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Additionally
,
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,
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
key benefit is that sports
is
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are
the main source of learning
importance
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the importance
of
team
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work
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. It
demontrates
give an exhibition of to an interested audience
demonstrates
that only through
team
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work
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the essential goals is achieved.
Strong
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A strong team
team
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without
team
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cooperation often fails to win, on
other hand even
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the other hand, even
the other hand even
the average
team
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wins through strong
team
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work
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. The essay believes that the children can learn both the
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team
cooperative work done by a team (especially when it is effective)
teamwork
work
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and competition through sport activities
.
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • competition
  • teamwork
  • individual sports
  • team sports
  • perseverance
  • resilience
  • goals
  • support
  • responsibilities
  • social bonds
  • community
  • communicate
  • trust
  • group effort
  • balanced perspective
  • well-rounded skill set
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