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Public transportation could be made free of charge.Are there more advantages or disadvantages to this change.

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Public transportation is used on a daily basis by people all over the society.
Thus
, there must be fees for using it, because it needs regular maintenance to the engine, gearbox, and
also
 battery and tire exchange. So, there will be a lot of drawbacks if it becomes for free.
Firstly
, public transportation like buses or trains are working all over the day and the majority of people rely on them to travel to their work, go out with family or friends, and sending their children to schools.
Hence
, it cannot stop working or even pause.
For instance
, there are workers who apply a train to arrive to their work daily and there is no other way to go there, but the train, if the employees would not go to the firm, the whole organisation may stop.
Moreover
, that will affect the income of that company as a normal result.
Furthermore
, people will care about the quality and cleanness of the transportation, because they pay to get the service.
Nevertheless
, changing it to be free,
consequently
, it will wisely utilize.
For example
, if public use it without paying, they will not care about the conditions of chairs that they use, In fact, there are two main questions, how can the government cover the payment of the reconstruction of all buses and trains in the nation, if public exploit it on bad manner?, and what about the tourists who will use it when they visit the country?. To conclude, people must play an active and a positive role in the community by helping the government to give them a high quality service that they deserve.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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