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It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. What are the advantages and disadvantages.

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It is becoming increasingly famous to have a
year
gap
 between completing school and going to university. The main disadvantage is that the students will have less concentration on their career if they have a
year
gap
 from school to
college
. Though the advantage
is student
Suggestion
is, a student
is a student
 can do some courses
on
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in
 their relevant stream. It will be easier for them in their
first
year
college
.
For example
, they are going to join in IT stream they can plan to join computer programming related courses. It will be useful
from
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for
 them to understand quickly at
college level
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the college level
. Meanwhile, they complete many major courses by spending 3-4 hours per day. It will be useful for them to understand the programming and structures easily. But the disadvantage is like
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 said earlier that some student may not take it as a career challenge. They may have
concentrate
Suggestion
concentrated
 on spending time on their games and with friends after completing their board exams.
For instance
, They will spend their leisure time on outing, playing and with families.
THis
Suggestion
This
These
Thus
 will lead to have less concentrate on their selection of their
college
 courses.
Student
Suggestion
Students
 will lack some knowledge in their stream and
cant
can not
can't
 be focused on their
college
 subjects. In conclusion, it will be
goog
having desirable or positive qualities especially those suitable for a thing specified
good
 by reducing the
year
gap
 between school to
college
 life for
students
Suggestion
students'
 career. By reducing a
year
gap
, they will get focused on their
next
 level of education by selecting appropriate courses and colleges in an effective manner.

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