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Nowadays, in many countries chemicals are used to produce and preserve food. Are the advantages of this use overweigh the disadvantages?

#countries #chemicals #food #overweigh
The present
food
 which is produced all over many countries have most chemicals used which preserve the
food
 for a long
time
.
Such
 kind of preservatives used basically tempts people to buy them though they have a lot of dangerous chemicals which
effects
have an effect upon
affects
 the body.
Firstly
,
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,
the government should take
initiative
Suggestion
the initiative
 to check the amount of chemicals used in the
food
 preservation.Like
for example
,
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,
A noodle company in
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
 was banned which had lead content in it which is used as a preservative.There are many
such
 companies which were banned as they had
lot
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lots
 of
chemicals even
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chemicals, even
 the coke is banned in many countries.A chocolate named kinder joy which
also
 had chemicals effected the young children's brain is
also
 banned in
few countries
Suggestion
a few countries
.The more use of chemicals the
food
 can be kept for a longer
time
.
Secondly
,
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,
The main reason for
such
 kind of chemicals is what the humans are reliable on
such
 foods like
for example
,
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,
at present people have no
time
 to cook
food
 so they just check for the one which takes less
time
 there are many instant noodles
,
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,
insta
curries
a person who is the aim of an attack (especially a victim of ridicule or exploitation) by some hostile person or influence
quarries
where
Suggestion
had been
were
have been
 just water is added and it is done.Unless there
is
Suggestion
are
 some chemicals added to it the
food
 can never be cooked in
such
 a short
time
.Pickles have so some preservatives which make it stay fresh for a longer
time
.There are can be many disadvantages
by
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of
 having
such
food
 like cancer
,
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,
sugar levels increase and bad
cholestrol
an animal sterol that is normally synthesized by the liver; the most abundant steroid in animal tissues
cholesterol
 which
effects
have an effect upon
affects
 the human health. To sum up
,
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,
the only advantage is
time
 saving using
such
 type of
food
 and so the disadvantages are more when compared with the benefits of having these preserve
foods it
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foods, it
 is better people avoid
such
 foods as far as possible to remain healthy.

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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