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Some young people look forward to a year of travelling, a gap year, before they begin work or university and see it as a chance to broaden their horizons. For others, this is an expensive waste of time. Which viewpoint do you agree with?

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It is believed by many that taking a
year
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 off from studies and roaming around the world is an ultimate source of knowledge. While some believe that
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 act is a waste of
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 the latter mode of thinking, as
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 is precious and wasting it will result in a waste of potential resources. In order
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 with,
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 once gone would never come back, meaning that what is now, would not remain the same, later in life.
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, if one has received the admission in university or college but decided to postpone it, might face difficulty getting into the same institute a
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 later, which would be because the centre has now more competent applicants or the institute has closed down the prospective department.
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, after a
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 the situation is not the same as it was before, on account of change in
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 frame.
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, travelling requires financial resources as well, and spending valuable means on tours might result in deprivation of resources-allocated specifically for education. To cite one example, one of my friends had worked a part
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 job throughout his high school, and the hard earned money was saved for college. But
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 he decided to take a gap
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 and spent the whole money on trips. Moving forward, a
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 later when he decided to pursue education, nothing was left for tuition fees.
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, the funds once saved could have been used for fees, if not wasted on visits. To conclude, in my opinion,
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time
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the time
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comes, with
 opportunities in terms of financial resources and education and trading it off with a gap
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 or with travelling will result in loss of aforementioned positives.

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