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Some people think that children should learn to read from traditional paper books, while others feel that it is fine to start the reading process on an e-reader (like a Kindle or iPad). Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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With the help of
technology
, we have shifted from paper books to e-book readers. Some are of the opinion that youngsters should read from paperback,
on the contrary
, others are of the opinion that using
technology
 in learning through new age gadgets
such
 as Kindle or iPad is better. In my view, we should use the
technology
 to teach our children in schools. The supporters of traditional reading material argue that it is better in the long term for young people. While studying one has to concentrate hard on the book, reading on paper book make no or very less strain on their eyes.
In contrast
, reading on e-book reader for a long time that has blue
lite
(physics) electromagnetic radiation that can produce a visual sensation
light
, is not good for their health. If we insist our children to go for
this
 new
technology
, it will surely effect on their vision in
long run
Suggestion
the long run
.
On the other hand
, I argue that we should shift from paper based to e- reading for its numerous benefits.
Although
 using an iPad is not so healthy for a child, if used in moderation and with precautions it is a useful
technology
. It creates more interest in reading and because it is interactive they learn with fun.
For example
, my four year old niece is more interested in my iPad, whenever she gets a chance to have it, she opens up her favourite lesson and try to learn it.
with
Suggestion
With
 its benefits it is better for new age children to make use of
this
technology
. In conclusion, reading through traditional method has its own charm, at the same time I side with the 21st century new age reading material through which a child can learn with interest.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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