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The globalization has brought both advantages and disadvantages.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#globalization
Sooner or later the entire
world
 will be operating as a single unit, thanks to
globalization
. In my opinion, I completely agree that
globalization
 has led to some benefits for certain countries, but its drawback are
also
 being suffered by other nations.
This
 essay will discuss the pros and detrimental effects of
globalization
.
To begin
 with, there are a myriad of advantages that has resulted from
globalization
 and one of the key benefits is that it helps in relieving international tension.
In other words
, countries who have a history of conflict for various reasons are now putting aside their differences because of the benefits of
globalization
such
 as the access of goods and services from other countries.
For example
, South Korea and North Korea were at war for several years, but they resolved
this
 fight because North Korea had to allow importation of grains and flours from South Korea
as a result
 of famine in their country.
This
 decision from North Korea helped resolve
this
 issue that has lasted for decades.
Furthermore
,
globalization
also
 promotes cultural awareness among people,
this
 makes people to be more friendly to others who are not like them, thereby promoting international peace.
On the other hand
, the developing countries are experiencing a significant reduction in their workforce because
globalization
 promotes the migration of people in developed countries. In an attempt to make the
world
 a single globe, transportation has become easier for people compared to before because of the visa restrictions. To illustrate
this
 point, visas are no longer required for citizens of certain developing countries when they want to visit developed nations.
Although
this
 idea was to encourage
globalization
,
instead
 it has resulted in a brain drain in a lot of
third
world
 countries.
Additionally
,
globalization
 empowers the so called bigger countries because of their blooming economy,
thus
 allowing them to control the lesser countries by demanding extra money to help them with building of infrastructure. To conclude, despite the increase in the rate of
globalization
, it is important to note that
although
globalization
 helps in eliminating dispute among nations as well as encouraging cultural awareness, it
also
 affects the economy of
third
world
 countries.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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