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Some people believe that tourists should accept social and environmental responsibility while others believe that tourists should not accept any responsibility at all. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people reckon that the tourist needs to accept all social and environmental responsibility where they visit while others disagree with them. I believe tourists need to accept all these responsibilities. Some people think If
someone
 visits any
country
, they need to accept the responsibility related to social and environmental. They believe even for some time they are part of that
country
, but they need to obey all the rules and regulations of the
country
. We can'
t
 allow them to violate any rules and regulations of the
country
.
For instance
, If
someone
 visits the USA and while crossing roads he/she didn'
t
 obey the traffic rule, so they can'
t
 claim any leverage of tourists. If they do anything wrong, they need to be punished for that.
On the other hand
, Some people think we can'
t
 restrict the tourists to obey all the rules and regulations because they are our guests. They visit here to explore our
country
 and we need to give them respect and can'
t
 force them to obey all rules and regulations until, if there act to harm
someone
.
For example
, if
someone
 visits the northern area of Pakistan, we can'
t
 enforce them to wear specific dresses in that area, they are our guests we need to facilitate them so they left us with good memories. In conclusion, both have their own point of view, but every area or
country
 has some rules and regulation and they are above either you are a guest or citizens of the
country
. They need to be obeyed in every circumstance. So tourists need to accept all these responsibilities,
this
 will
also
 help them in exploring the visiting
country
.

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