Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Now a days
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Nowadays
, the
competition
between students are
become
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becoming
natural because of some of the educational institutions and the parents.There were mixed opinions about the
competition
between students. The healthy
competition
leads to a good career.
However
, the high
competition
in
the education create
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education creates the
the education creates
problems
to
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in
with
their life as well. In
this
essay, I will explain my opinion about both the healthy and unhealthy
competition
based on my knowledge. The
postive
characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.
positive
side of the
competition
make
students
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the students
to grow
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grow
faster in the knowledge.In
this
approach, they can learn the subjects by co-
operating each other
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operating with each other
. When students start learning in
this
way
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way, then
then
they have more learning scope from others.
For example
, Pair programming was introduced recently in the software development.I am
also
part of that in my
last
project development.When
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
did developed
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did develop
have developed
with my friend I am very sure
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
did
learned
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learn
f
connects a noun with the preceding word
of
new things from him as well as my friend
also
the same. Coming to the other side of
this
, There were more incidents happened in the schools because of the
competition
between the schools not between the students.In
this
digital world, the parents and the institutions forced their
chidren
a young person of either sex
children
to participate in multiple aspects without their interest.With
lack
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the lack
of interest students are not able to
affend
come upon, as if by accident; meet with
find
the
competition
and it leads to suicides.
Like wise
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Likewise
,
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,
In India some of the survey's noticed that most of the students are not able to concentrate on their interested subjects due to the
competition
with outside the world. In conclusion, The parents have to take inputs from their
chidren
a young person of either sex
children
on what they want?
and
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And
encourage them to move
further
on wanted things. And the institutions
also
motivate children and give suggestions to handle the
competition
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competition, then
then
eventhough
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even though
they have
lot
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lots
of pressure with
competition
they will survive and continue
further
.

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