Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Now a days

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Nowadays

, the

competition

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between students are

become

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becoming

natural because of some of the educational institutions and the parents.There were mixed opinions about the

competition

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between students. The healthy

competition

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leads to a good career.

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, the high

competition

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the education create

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education creates the

the education creates

problems

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with

their life as well. In

this

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essay, I will explain my opinion about both the healthy and unhealthy

competition

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based on my knowledge. The

postive

characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.

positive

side of the

competition

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make

students

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the students

to grow

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grow

faster in the knowledge.In

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approach, they can learn the subjects by co-

operating each other

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operating with each other

. When students start learning in

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way

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way, then

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they have more learning scope from others.

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, Pair programming was introduced recently in the software development.I am

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part of that in my

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project development.When

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did develop

have developed

with my friend I am very sure

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did

learned

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learn

connects a noun with the preceding word

new things from him as well as my friend

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the same. Coming to the other side of

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, There were more incidents happened in the schools because of the

competition

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between the schools not between the students.In

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digital world, the parents and the institutions forced their

chidren

a young person of either sex

children

to participate in multiple aspects without their interest.With

lack

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the lack

of interest students are not able to

affend

come upon, as if by accident; meet with

find

the

competition

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and it leads to suicides.

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Likewise

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In India some of the survey's noticed that most of the students are not able to concentrate on their interested subjects due to the

competition

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with outside the world. In conclusion, The parents have to take inputs from their

chidren

a young person of either sex

children

on what they want?

and

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encourage them to move

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on wanted things. And the institutions

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motivate children and give suggestions to handle the

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competition

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competition, then

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eventhough

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even though

they have

lot

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lots

of pressure with

competition

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they will survive and continue

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Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.5

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

298 words

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