Many people now undertake extreme activities, from hang-gliding to mountain climbing. Why do people risk their lives in this way, and do you think this is a good trend?

There is no doubt that extreme activities
such
as hang-gliding, mountain climbing etc... Are trending across the world. Some people think that these kind of activities are very dangerous, and others argue that people perform these activities under the guidance of experts. As far as I am concerned, these kind of activities are more harmful, and sometimes it may
leads
Suggestion
lead
to death as well. There are many people across the world, who risk their lives just to experience
thrill
Suggestion
the thrill
.
For example
, consider India, here every year in the month of March, many people goes to the Himalayas to climb the mount
everest
a mountain in the central Himalayas on the border of Tibet and Nepal; the highest mountain peak in the world (29,028 feet high)
Everest
. Some people complete their task and come back while some people die, climbing the mountain.
This
is because of the low temperatures at the heights of the Himalayas. Even though, people take heavy jackets which protect them from the cold temperatures, sometimes the temperatures goes very low where jackets can't help them. There are a few people who do these activities just to get more likes in social media apps for their posts. We can
also
find people who have chosen to do risky activities as their professional career. In shows like Indian talent show, we can see people who does very dangerous activities in front of camera to earn money. They risk their lives to earn money and popularity. Every individual has right to follow his dreams. As far as I am concerned, it's all depends upon the individual to take the risk or not. Having said that, Parents please do not allow children to take up these high risky activities.
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