The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph illustrates how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010.

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, an upward trend was experienced by watching tv, hiking, reading and surfing the internet,

while

the Theater showed a downward trend. Almost most of the activities had some fluctuations except for hiking. In

1980s

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popularity

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the popularity

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of reading increased to about 10%. But from

1990s

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the 1990s

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, it went down even lower than it was before. Anyway, it became trendy again with its rapid jump in 2000. Hiking was slowly and steadily gaining

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demand from

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the 1980s

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to about 60%. Theatres were the only activity, losing

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fame in

1980s

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, but

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started gaining it again from

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the 1990s

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2000s

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the 2000s

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and slowly moving up after. TV has been always

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one of the highest positions, nearly 60% of people in

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the 1980s

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, spent their spare time watching

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TV and it reached

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around 70% two decades later. But its popularity dropped and is slowly moving down since the internet became trendy in

2000s

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. Having lower than 10%

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popularity among the elderly till

2000s

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the level of people preferring the way of spending their free time rapidly increased in

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the 2000s

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and is trending to move higher so it pretends to have one of the highest or even the highest rank among all activities listed before.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

223 words

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The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The impact that growing demand for more flights has had on the environment is a major concern for many countries. Some people believe that one way to limit the number of people traveling by air is to increase taxes on flights. To what extent do you think this could solve the problem?

Inmany countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people to buy local food?

Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.