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Some people consider price as the most important thing to think about when buying a product (such as cell phone) or service (e.g. medical treatment). Do you agree or disagree?

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From amongst many considerations when deciding to purchase a product or service, it is believed by many, that
price
 holds the most importance. While
this
 might be true in some cases, in my opinion, any purchase decision should weigh in several other nuances as well.
For example
, it is important to carefully chart out purpose, reusability, personal likes and dislikes before buying goods or services. It is essential that
one
 deliberates on the
price
 when making purchases. In most cases, the
price
 of a product is directly
corelated
mutually related
correlated
 with its quality.
Although
 different goods and services demand different considerations. Take the example of a car. If
one
 is just starting to drive, a hatchback that provides basic amenities might be
most economical
Suggestion
more economical
. For someone starting a family, an SUV is the best given the space and other advanced safety features it can offer. Services are typically intangible in nature and are measured through a positive or negative experience.
Besides
price
,
one
 must be aware of the reputation of the organization providing the service because that typically reflects the quality of the services rendered. Not just that, there could be many other ancillary capabilities that can be
additionally
 utilized along with core services.
For example
, in the technology world, cloud services are rendered by most major players like Amazon and Google. They both come with
similar pricing option
Suggestion
similar pricing options
a similar pricing option
,
that is
, pay per
use but
Accept comma addition
use, but
 consumers have been preferring Amazon because of the additional breadth and depth of services that the Amazon platform can provide the developers. In conclusion,
price
Suggestion
the price
 certainly holds value in making choices.
Although
, the purpose, stakeholders and other considerations are
also
 other useful factors when consuming products and services. Only when
one
 factors in a holistic view,
one
 truly pays for the value of the product and service.
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