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Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind the bars. To what extent do you agree?

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Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid
community
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work
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 of being put behind the bars and I completely agree with
this
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 statement. I believe prisoners should be given
community
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 tasks
such
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 as serving patients in the
community
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 hospital, doing
work
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 at the old age homes, cleaning tasks
at
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in
 the
community
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 schools etc.
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 way the prisoners can build their trust and reputation, getting
firsthand
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first hand
 experience of the society. It is
oftten
many times at short intervals
often
 seen that a convicted person finds it difficult, almost
imposible
not capable of occurring or being accomplished or dealt with
impossible
 to find a job after their release. Engaging prisoners in social and
community
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 services would help prisoners have some sort of
community
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 experience and it would be useful for them to find a job. The government can
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 later hire these prisoners looking at their experience and interest.
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 would ensure employment and growth for the prisoners. Government can
shortlist according
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shortlist, according
 to the
work
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 a prisoner has done. To sum
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 up, I would say
governmennt
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the government
government
governments
 should
definately
without question and beyond doubt
definitely
 think of making prisoners do unpaid
community
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work
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 of being put behind the bars.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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